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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.,and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the
consumption
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 rate of three types of nutrients(
sodium
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, saturated Fats and added sugars) on daily
meals
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 in the USA.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the highest
Consumption
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 of
sodium
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 and Saturated Fat were at
Dinner
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,
While
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 added
sugar
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 was eaten too much in the snack
meals
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. If we look at the charts, we can find that the highest
Consumption
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 average for
sodium
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 is about 43% for the
dinner
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 meal followed by Lunch
meals
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 which are accounted for 29%.
However
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, the Breakfast
meals
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 and snacks both of them contain an equal amount of
sodium
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 around 14%.
Furthermore
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, the large
Consumption
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 of Saturated Fat was in the
Dinner
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 and Lunch meal at 37% and 26% respectively.
In addition
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, snack
meals
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 contain about 21% of saturated Fat but The Breakfast meal Can be considered a healthy meal because it contains only 16% of saturated Fat. the highest percentage of added
sugar
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 was in snack
meals
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 accounting for 42%. The
Dinner
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 Contain approximately 23%of added
Sugar
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.
While
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 fewer amounts of
sugar
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 were added to the Breakfast and lunch
meals
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 at 16% and 19% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, sodium, meals, dinner, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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