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Some believe children spending time on television and games is beneficial.others don't agree.discuss both views and give opinion.

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 some people believe that video
games
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 and television are advantageous for offspring, and
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 there are some who disagree. In my opinion, I agree with the statement. Since
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 is not age-restricted, so parental surveillance should be emphasized.
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, long screen hours can impact the health of the child. On the one hand, there are no regulations on the type of
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that is
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 available to the general public. So, many young
children
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 get exposed to the things which should be learned much later in their lives. But, if their parents step in and take the responsibility to monitor the type of shows, movies and
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 they i.
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,
this
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 could prove to be beneficial for their
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 development and will help them to focus on relevant objectives in their lives.
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, recently the government has commenced a
children
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's wellness program in France called "
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content
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,
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 age" where they educate parents about the importance of monitoring their
children
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. On the other, the main reason for weary eyes and eyesight problems is
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 long continuous hours of screen time.
Although
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 many of the youth know
this
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 very reason, still they continue to do so as video
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 and television are quite addictive. In fact, in a recent study, it is predicted that if the current trend of screen watch hours continues in the future,
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 40% of the global population will be dealing with eye-related issues sometime in their lives.
To conclude
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, television and
games
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 are one of the best sources for gaining knowledge, but parental watch must be put into practice so that their
children
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 consume the
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content
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 at the
right
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 age.
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