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With the increase of digital media available online the role of the library has become obsolete University should provide digital material rather than textbooks Discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of this position and give your own point of view

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In the contemporary world, people are engineered by nature and nurture to follow the tracks of technology.
Books
 are being replaced by
e-
books
 and online articles. Some people
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 that Universities should supplant hardcopy information with digital materials. It is irrefutable that there are both pros and cons
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this
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This
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the advantages and disadvantages of surging digital media usage before stating an opinion. (1) To commence with the facet of agreement, there is a myriad of things that needs to
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 in its favour. Primarily, digital
books
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cheaper and
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does not
 need additional space for storage
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physical ones. Often, textbooks conquer a colossal amount of space.
For instance
, the library in QUT, in Queensland, occupies four stories which account for more than 3000 square meters. Owing to the high
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philanthropic
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investment
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large
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,
e-
books
 are more
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convenient
.
Secondly
, Physical
books
 are prone to damage and need replacement more often.
On the other hand
,
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books
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 a
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 saves a
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 of money. The savings from
this
 can be invested in building better labs and other
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facilities
 in University.
For example
, it is estimated that each year Universities in Australia spend more than 3 billion dollars
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 replacing old and damaged
books
. (8) Shifting towards the second school of thought, digital materials, unless
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specific, leads to infobesity in students.
This
 can lead to
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 of vital information
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necessary
 for academic
as well as
 professional growth. One
such
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whims
 and fancies of the authors, leading to bemusement in health promotion professionals and graduates.
Furthermore
,
e-
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 technology to run
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 course, which is sometimes not a practical option for developing and under-developed countries.
Moreover
, long-term usage of
e-
books
 can lead to chronic eye
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 like
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computer vision syndrome,
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 can
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permanently
 damage the vision acuity of kids. To
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illustrate
, each year more than 1 million cases of computer vision syndrome and associated damage are
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reported globally
due to
 excessive usage of
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 and mobile phones. (6) In conclusion, the two sides of the
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argument
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tradition
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books
 have strong support.
However
, after a thorough analysis of
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both sides, I believe that the
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advantages
 of
e-
books
 inundate the hardcopy
books
. (3)
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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