Some think that people should not change their jobs while others think they should because it brings advantages for themselves, companies and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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People
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hold different opinions about whether switching
jobs
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benefits
employees
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or not.
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changing
jobs
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takes its toll in many aspects, I believe that
people
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should change
jobs
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for self-benefits,
companies
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and
society
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. On one hand, staying at the same job for a long time can benefit
employees
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in many
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such
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as social insurance and financial stability. They are made sure to have stable salaries monthly with enough insurance regimes so their lives are ensured.
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, job-hopping regularly are evaluated as impatience and instability so employers rarely recruit
people
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with
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kind of character.
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, they may face unemployment and make it difficult to make their livings.
On the other hand
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, many
people
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and I believe that changing
jobs
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helps
employees
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develop themselves, and brings lots of advantages for
companies
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and
society
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. Workers can have an opportunity to enhance their knowledge and learn new skills which can promote them to higher responsibilities.
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, by jumping in, learning and taking charge of new
jobs
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, they can learn new processes, hone their communication skills and enlarge their relationships.
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,
companies
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can have candidates with varied experience, which
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their business’ productivity and
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builds
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skilled workforces not only for their
companies
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but
also
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for
society
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. In conclusion, staying in the same job may have a positive effect on
employees
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in finance.
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, for the sake of self-development, boosting
companies
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’ profit and building skilled workforces for
society
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, workers should switch their
jobs
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.
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Task response
The essay addresses the prompt effectively by discussing both views on changing jobs and providing a clear opinion.
Coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, providing a clear overview of the essay.

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