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Some people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

#people #tax #industries #pollution #alternative
It has been argued that
bad
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a bad
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 situation occurs ,but what is
more bad
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worse
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 is to set still, and do nothing to
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Enhance
 it .
However
, others say that it is better to accept it rather than
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work
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 to find
silutions
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solutions
.In my opinion, I agree with those who believe in improving their lives constantly.
furthermore
, I will elaborate
both
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on both
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 views and give examples.
To begin
, individuals
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think that a man should be satisfied with what he has. They are convinced
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of
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this
 notion for several reasons.
Firstly
, They may think that trying to
inhance
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enhance
 the situation may lead to
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worsening
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 it.
In other words
, if they didn't thank god, they may lose What they
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have
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.
secondly
, some people are just lazy to do anything ,so they
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convinced
theirselves
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themselves
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 with these words rather than try to find
what
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out what
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have
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has
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 gone wrong.
on the other hand
, other people can't set still and do nothing as they tend to be hard
werker
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workers
 these humans can't accept a bad situation.
For example
,
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a student
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student
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students
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 in
the
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apply
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college do their best to pass their
examies
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exams
eventhough
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even though
 they get
low
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the low
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score
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scores
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 they will keep trying to improve their marks.
while
 ,others
studen
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student
 will just
surander
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surrender
, and stop Studying and may drop out college.
to conclude
, some people are
to
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too
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 lazy to develop themselves
whereas
 other spend the
whol
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whole
 day. working, assuming that the
different
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difference
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 between These 2
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groups
,
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are
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is
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 their ways of thinking.
Whereas
, the first group tend to find excuses for their
failer
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failure
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,
while
 the second group are energised and
try
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tries
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 to find new ways to develop.
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