Some people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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situation occurs ,but what is
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is to set still, and do nothing to
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, others say that it is better to accept it rather than
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to find
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.In my opinion, I agree with those who believe in improving their lives constantly.
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, I will elaborate
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views and give examples.
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, individuals
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think that a man should be satisfied with what he has. They are convinced
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this
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notion for several reasons.
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, They may think that trying to
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enhance
the situation may lead to
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it.
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, if they didn't thank god, they may lose What they
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.
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, some people are just lazy to do anything ,so they
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convinced
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with these words rather than try to find
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have
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gone wrong.
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, other people can't set still and do nothing as they tend to be hard
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workers
these humans can't accept a bad situation.
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,
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a student
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student
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students
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in
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college do their best to pass their
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exams
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even though
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score
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they will keep trying to improve their marks.
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,others
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student
will just
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surrender
, and stop Studying and may drop out college.
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, some people are
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lazy to develop themselves
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other spend the
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whole
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between These 2
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groups
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are
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their ways of thinking.
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, the first group tend to find excuses for their
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,
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the second group are energised and
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to find new ways to develop.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution reduction
  • accountable
  • cleaner technologies
  • tax revenue
  • environmental projects
  • mitigate pollution
  • stricter regulations
  • public awareness campaigns
  • behavior change
  • sustainable practices
  • incentives
  • green technology adoption
  • negative economic consequences
  • alternative methods
  • enforcement
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