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Tourism is becoming a good source of revenue for many countries. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of developing this industry.

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As governments around the world seek to generate economic growth opportunities, an increasing number of countries are trying to develop their
tourism
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industries
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.
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 there are undoubted financial benefits associated with attracting visitors from abroad, it can be a double-edged sword because of the problems linked to an increase in tourists. Regarding the advantages of
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industries
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,
tourism
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 constitutes a significant proportion of the gross domestic product (GDP). The majority of a
country
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’s population can be employed in many different places of employment. Profits earned from
tourism
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 can be reinvested to the
country
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 for developing better infrastructure, education and so on. So
tourism
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 and its attraction for visitors can let the
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 maintain the positive cycle of the
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.
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, in terms of the disadvantages of
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industries
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, environmental damage is the main drawback. When a
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 has high
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 attractions, an increasing number of tourists will occupy the space.
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, it will increase traffic congestion and
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 has a negative effect on the
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’s environment.
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, we can see the exploitation of
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,
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 known as the term ‘commercialization’. If we replace our
culture
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 with a commodity, we might forget the essence of sacred
culture
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. In conclusion,
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 there are clear motivations for a
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 to develop its
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industries
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, the drawbacks of
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 a policy should not be ignored because of the environmental issues and the possibility to destroy the nature of a
culture
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.
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