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Some people say the best way to discourage smoking is to make smoking illegal on public places. Other people say that this is not enough and other measures are needed. Discuss both views and give tour own opinion.

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Smoking has become a controversial topic in the present, because of its negative impacts.
However
, some individuals think that
people
 can be discouraged by making smoking illegal in public areas,
whereas
 others believe it is not enough. In my opinion, extra measures should be taken to discourage smoking.
This
 essay is to discuss
about
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both views and personal
view
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views
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.
To begin
 with, smoking generates an increasing number of drawbacks to consumers and their surroundings.
In other words
, smoking affects
people
 actively
as well as
 passively. In most countries smoking in public is prohibited to reduce passive effects
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non-smoking
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community
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communities
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, especially pregnant mothers, children and patients. For an instance, if someone
caught
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while
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consuming a
cigarette
 in a public place in Australia, they will be arrested and charged with serious punishments. In fact,
this
 approach supports
to reduce
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 the usage of
cigarette
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 in public.
However
, it is insufficient as
people
 can smoke in their houses,private officers etc.In order
reduce
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this
 usage there should be more actions
such
 as
increase
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 in tax on cigarettes,
display
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 consequences of smoking on packages. In terms of taxes, the UK introduced
large
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tax
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taxes
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 on tobacco products and
as a result
 sales of these products dropped significantly.
On the other hand
, publishing images on
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a carton
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carton
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cartons
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 of
cigarette
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cigarettes
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also
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is also
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 a good solution.
For example
, a famous university in Sri Lanka did
a
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research on advertising negative results of
cigarette
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cigarettes
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 on its packages
,
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 and found out
this
 supported to drop
sales
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 within
couple
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 of months.
To conclude
 as responsible citizens we should take
actions
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 to discourage
people
 from smoking.
This
 cannot be done only by making laws for smoking in public places. Governments should take every possible
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 to mitigate
this
 problem immediately.
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