The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012
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The line graph provides the differences that took place in three different categories of crime (burglary,
car
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theft
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, and robbery (
theft
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from the person)) in New Port city
center
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between 2003 and 2012.
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car
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theft
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,
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and robbery trends
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similarly
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fluctuated
while
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burglary saw
significant
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drop
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. First of all,
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a number
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of incidents of
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theft
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were
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around 2700 between 2003 and 2005, before it
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to exactly 2000 in 2006. After that,
car
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theft
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gradually increased to reach 2700 again in 2012.
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, robbery was 500 in 2003
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and grew by almost 400 to reach 900 in 2005, before it
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to 500 by 2008. Since
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, it fluctuated between 750 in 2010 and 600 in 2011 before
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the rise
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rise
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to 750 in 2012.
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, burglary increased to around 4000 in 2004, which was 3400 in 2003. Since
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, it saw
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a significant
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drop
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of 2500 to reach 1200 in 2800, before it showed
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a slight
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increase of 200 to 1400 in 2009. Between 2009 and 2012,
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number was
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at 1400.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, theft, drop with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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