The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012
The line graph provides the differences that took place in three different categories of crime (burglary,
car
theft
, and robbery (theft
from the person)) in New Port city center
between 2003 and 2012. Change the spelling
centre
It is clear that
car
theft
,
and robbery trends Remove the comma
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are
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similarly
fluctuated while
burglary saw significant
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a significant
drop
.
First of all, number
of incidents of Change the article
a number
the number
car
theft
were
around 2700 between 2003 and 2005, before it Change the verb form
was
drop
to exactly 2000 in 2006. After that, car
theft
gradually increased to reach 2700 again in 2012. Similarly
, robbery was 500 in 2003,
and grew by almost 400 to reach 900 in 2005, before it Remove the comma
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drop
to 500 by 2008. Since then
, it fluctuated between 750 in 2010 and 600 in 2011 before Add an article
the rise
a rise
rise
to 750 in 2012.
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rising
On the other hand
, burglary increased to around 4000 in 2004, which was 3400 in 2003. Since then
, it saw significant
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a significant
drop
of 2500 to reach 1200 in 2800, before it showed slight
increase of 200 to 1400 in 2009. Between 2009 and 2012, Add an article
a slight
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