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The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart compares how many
residents
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 and
Non-
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residents
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 made a journey by car from 1996 to 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the average
number
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 of
journeys
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 for
residents
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 tended to decrease.
However
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,
Non-
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residents
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 choose cars to make a journey that experienced fluctuation during the time period, eventually, the
figures
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 for
Non-
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residents
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 had a sour trend. Looking
further
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,the average
number
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 of
journeys
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 for
residents
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 was the largest position from around 10000 in 1996 to 9500 in 1999. At the same time, the
number
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 of car
journeys
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 for Non-
residents
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 was half time than that of
residents
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 in 1996, after that, the
figures
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 for
Non-
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residents
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 remained at a steady raise of roughly 8000 until 1999. From 2000 to 2002, because parking meters were introduced in the city centre, the
figures
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 for
residents
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 stepped into plummeted during
this
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 period, and they maintained at roughly 5000 per day.
By contrast
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, it is obvious that the
number
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 of
journeys
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 for
Non-
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residents
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 had an upward tendency, and reached 8000. Another reason was that Westgate street and park lane closed to traffic after 2002, which had an evident effect on streams of
journeys
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 for
Non-
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residents
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, making it decline to below 5000.
Additionally
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,
due to
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this
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 reason, the
figures
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 for
residents
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further
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 decreased and kept at about 4000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words residents, non-residents, number, journeys, figures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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