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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railways lines for very fast trains between cities.Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some countries, building new
railways
 for fast trains has become a controversial
topic
. Some people support spending large budgets on the construction of new
railways
,
while
 opponents believe that the money should spend on improving public transport, which countries have already.
This
 essay will explore both views and state a conclusion on
this
topic
. Fast trains have been spreading all around the world
due to
 their speed and high technological advantages. Some citizens think that because of their merits,
such
 as creating convenient roads to access any city in a country and spending less fee for transportation rather than old public transport systems. These benefits might be worth spending overwhelming funds on fast rails.
Conversely
, some people take a diverse stance on
this
 idea because they believe that building new
railways
 means more deforestation around the cities to create space for these
railways
;
also
, new transportation methods contribute to the city's air pollution because of their fuel consumption.
Therefore
, new
railways
 might be detrimental to the environment. Another point opponents consider is that updating the old public transport system may be cheaper because they already exist and just need some developments.
Moreover
, by doing that, the amount of money governments would be spending can be transferred to solve other issues in a country. It can be reiterated that the
topic
 of new
railways
 has its supporters and opponents
due to
 the reasons, which are mentioned previously.
However
, I
also
 believe that not building new
railways
 might be budget and environment-friendly for most countries.
Therefore
, governments should consider both views on
this
topic
 before taking action.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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