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Some people say Histroy is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
History
 is the major school lesson. Some
people
 think that nowadays,
Science
 and
Technology
 are more significant than
history
.
This
 essay agrees that
Science
 and
Technology
 are more important than
history
.
Technology
 and
science
 are the
future
 so students without any knowledge of
technology
 or
science
 will have a problem in the
future
.
Technology
 is a huge improvement in life and education with
technology
 everything is easier to do and easier to learn . It is agreed that everyone is going
future
 not the past so students have to
learn
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 improve their
future
. The medicine industry is a prime example, in the past, a small sickness can cause death but these days thanks to
science
 every small disease has a cure.
However
, many
people
 think that
history
 is more important and humanity should take a lesson from their past to not make the same mistakes again but with
technology
 and
science
 we can predict the
future
 and there will be less point of getting to learn
history
. If humanity is stuck in the past there will be no improvement for them.
For instance
, In turkey so many
people
 are stuck in
history
 and denying
technology
 and
science
 because of that the country won’t be able to improve like other countries. In conclusion,
while
 the benefits of
technology
 and
science
 allow making predictions and improvements, some still feel that
people
 should learn about their pasts because the past enlights the
future
.
However
, with
technology
, there is no point to learn the past because predicting the
future
 is possible.
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