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Write an essay on the advantages and dis advantages of small and large families.

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Nowadays, the population of
people
 increases in the world. Many
people
,
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 believe that when they bring so many children it is good for the family.
However
, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do
this
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the positives and negatives of big and small
families
 and some of the challenges to be overcome. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of big
families
. One of the main positives is that when you have a large number of uncles or aunts you will have more cousins. What I mean by
this
 is that when you have to go to the house of your grandfather or mother you can some
people
 that in your age.
For example
, you can play with them.
In addition
, you can go outdoors with them if you have some problem they came beside you.
This
 can make feel that you have a backbone that you can trust on them.
secondly
, we are going to talk about small
families
 the most advantage is that when have to celebrate you will not have to be tired because there are only a few
people
 that you will invite them.
Moreover
, if you want to bring gifts you will not lose so much money. Turning the other side of the argument is that if all the
families
 do not want to bring more children the population will decrease a
lot
.
In addition
, If you have big
families
 some parents do not have a
lot
 of money but if they bring a
lot
 of kids the percentage of
people
 who will get homeless will get high.
To conclude
this
 essay there are a
lot
 of positives and negatives that I did not mention . Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of the big family are more comfortable and we get more fun.
In addition
, if you get in trouble all the family come with you even if you need money.
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