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In some countries, owning a house rather than renting one is very important for people. Why is this might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It goes without saying that it has been ages since humans look for places to stay and live.
In other words
,
accommodation
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 has been an imperative part of human life. In past, they were usually building houses by themselves, but with the modern revolution in developed countries and
also
 since money was invented,
people
 have to buy or rent houses.
Moreover
, some
people
 think owning a
house
 is more important than renting. As far as I am concerned, the benefits of owning a
house
 are more than renting
one
 and in what follows, the reasons are elaborated.
One
 significant reason coming to mind why owning a
house
 is so important for some
people
 is the fact that
people
 do not want to be responsible for paying monthly rental fees and follow strict rules specified by the landlord. A compelling example can drive
this
 notion home. I used to rent flats when I was a student and the rule was to pay 2 months' rent fee as a deposit at the beginning. Paying the deposit was
one
 issue and
also
 getting it back was another issue. Long story short, I had to deal with different landlords with non-identical behaviours.
Besides
 some respectful landlords, I had a lot of problems with other ones,
such
 as not giving back the deposit by giving excuses or entering the
house
 without letting me know. If I had owned an apartment for myself, I would have lived in peace. Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the fact that owning an apartment is like an investment for the future.
In addition
, you have the opportunity to earn some extra money when you sell the
house
due to
 the fact that usually in most countries, building prices are increasing gradually. To sum it all up, having considered all the aforementioned reasons and examples, I strongly believe that owning a flat is way better than renting
one
 and
this
 situation is completely positive.
However
, it was just a story in a nutshell and there are more cogent reasons to be contemplated. I wish every individual own a flat and do not deal with any landlord.
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