some people tend to take temporary jobs, for they have time to do other things. Do the advantage outweighs disadvantage

In
modern
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the modern
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era, working for a short
time
becomes popular. Some people believe that it has a plethora of benefits
such
as
earn
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earning
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money fast when you needed urgently,
rehabilitate
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rehabilitating
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your
life
in special
cases
and so on.
However
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there are arguments like low-salary, unstable
life
and no career promotion. In
this
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I will discuss both sides of one coin and draw my own opinion. Let’s start by looking at
advantages
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the advantages
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. Temporary
jobs
can help to make money for more relevant things in your
life
. What I mean by saying
this
is that if you study at the University you should pay for
this
and temporary
jobs
like in
the
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restaurant or bars on vacation can considerably help to pay
it
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for it
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.
In addition
, working for a short
time
can assist to rehabilitate your
life
in a particular
time
period.
For example
, many inmates when they are released from prison should adapt to
new
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life style
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lifestyle
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especially after doing
long
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a long
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time
. They are not qualified for some acute
job
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jobs
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and temporary
jobs
are the best way to
adaptation
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adapt
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.
On the other hand
, working for a short
time
doesn’t ensure a good salary. It is obvious because in many
cases
temporary
jobs
are not needed some real qualifications or certificates from college. Take
a
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delivery
companies
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company
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as an example.
Mostly
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of
workers
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the workers
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in these companies don’t have any
diploma
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yet (because
of
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apply
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many of them
students
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, pupils, toddlers etc.). Another drawback is in many situations temporary
works
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work
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cannot ensure you a bright career promotion and lead to unstable
life
. It means that you actually don’t work in these types of
jobs
for a long
time
, because companies hire you just for a
while
or to finish one job and
then
you need to look for another job.
This
scenario leads to
disorder
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a disorder
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of
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in
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life
. What’s
more
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,more
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it’s difficult to focus on
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your goal
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goal
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goals
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and organise your
life
.
As a result
people just
emotional
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emotionally
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burn out
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burnout
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.
To
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conclusion, temporary
jobs
actually can assist you
in particular
cases
as I wrote above. But if you want balanced
life
and
good
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salary including
high
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a high
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career,
then
temporary
jobs
is
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are
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not your cup of tea. In my opinion, everything depends
of
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on
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life
situations. So, I partly agree with it because in some
cases
benefits
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the benefits
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of temporary
jobs
outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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