The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050

the graph shows the percentage of 4 different
age
groups
in the total population of New Zealand from 1950
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to
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2050 .
overall
,
while
the percentage of people from 25 to 37 is predicted to be on the decrease , the opposite was seen in other
groups
in 1950 , over 60 % of new
zealand ‘s
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Zealand's
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population were aged 60 or older , being the predominant
age
group,
while
the percentages of those aged 25-37 and 38-45 were similar , the people living in new zealand were 14
yeas
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years
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old or younger is only 5% . the next 50 years, the most senior
age
group still remind as the
lagerst
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largest
group , there were more 38to 45 years
olds
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old
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with
the
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figure of 40% . meanwhile , the data of
two
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the two
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youggest
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biggest
groups
were equal at
one tenth
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. by 2050 , estimations
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reveal
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reveal
that there
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will
wil
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will
be fewer people aged over 65 years old , at roughly 55% ,
while
the data
of
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those from 38 to 45 is expected to
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remain
ramain
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remain
unchanged ,
while
it is forecasted that there will be almost no one in the 25-37
age
groups
, drastic increase to a fifth is foreseen in the proportion of those aged 14 or younger
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