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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.
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This
 line chart depicts the amount of waste produced over
a
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 Interval of 15 years by
diffirent
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different
 three companies. ‏It is clear from the graph that
the
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company
 c had a Substantial of garbage during these years. ‏
According to
 what is shown,
company
 e start with 3 tonnes in 2000
then
 it has continued To climb until it
drop
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 in 2010, ‏After that fluctuated
company
 e represented to levelled at above 9. ‏
Company
 A had a higher amount
compairs
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compares
compared
 with other
company
. In 2000
company
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the company
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 A Trying To
redused
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reduced
reduce
wasteprodused
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waste produced
untill
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until
 It had a small drop in 2009.
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company
 B had a sharp Increased in 2005. both
company
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companies
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inistrated
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initiated
 a similar
pattem
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pattern
 ‏
forcompany
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for company
 A It is
droped
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dropped
draped
 in 2015 with 8 and com
company
 Buith 3. ‏
To sum up
, we could say that
Company
 A
,
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 and B
has
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have
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 a much
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lower amount
loweramount
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lower amount
 In
last
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the last
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 3 years ‏compare
withe
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with
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company
.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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