Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development? Write at least 250 words. Please try to write at least 250 words.

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These days an increasing number of
people
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are selecting socialized application services,
such
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as WeChat, TikTok and Facebook, to meet
further
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communicative chats and instant messages.
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, a person would chat and make a video call
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instead
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of meeting his family or friends offline.
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case is twofold. I would list its benefits and drawbacks
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and output my analysis later.
Firstly
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, rapidly developed social media has brought
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humanity different online
life styles
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lifestyles
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,
such
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as e-commerce, chatting, dating, training, and so on. Those social issues which were done by meeting face-to-face previously
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can be solved fast and effectively through the applications, not only on
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the website
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but
also
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on
mobile
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a mobile
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phone
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phones
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. Young
pepople
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people
who
work
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at
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outskirts
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the outskirts
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area can just make a video call to
his
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family
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downtown directly. And,
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, in the
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a person has to go to
shopping
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the shopping
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mall to buy a pair of shoes
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taking a half day, but nowadays, he just
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to place an order for the deal in a few minutes. Apparently, advanced technologies
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pushing
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society's development and
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people
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's horizon.
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,
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the pace of boosting
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, many young
people
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have to
work
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out of their hometowns, or even in other countries.
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,
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usual conversation facing each other in the past is difficult to achieve
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these days. They have to utilize a series of socialized software to chat and talk
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.
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,
a
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employee whose position is in a giant internet company has to
work
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from 9am to 9pm every day, and
also
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continue
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on Saturdays.
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work
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mechanism in society. The realistic situation, to some extent, is seriously resisting face-to-face communication in
community
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the community
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though
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human knows the benefits of it. In conclusion,
people
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who live in contemporary society have to face the challenges of lacking direct meet each other
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they contact and communicate
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through
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social media.
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batch of innovative technologies would offer a series of impacts
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traditional conversations, and it would
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supply
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, fresh and advanced approaches to enhance communication for
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humanity. There
is
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no
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that
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the future
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is just taking the future indeed.
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