Sports programmes are hugely popular on television nowadays. But some people argue that these programmes are to blame for the poor health of many young people who prefer to watch rather than part take in physical activity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people still watch
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sports
programmes
on
TV
, or on another device which can display a picture of the game. So
biggest
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part of viewers is
adults
who came tired from their work and want to relax,
therefore
switch on the electricity and sit on the sofa for a new soccer
programme
. Each country has an audience of fans who watch every
sport
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programme
everywhere, exactly most of them doesn'
t
want to become soccer player. But look more closely at the audience in some countries most part of it built from young people who just spend the whole day sitting around the television, and want to do nothing in their life, because
programmes
give a huge amount of emotions Most of the young audience have parents who really care about their
children's
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children
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,
thus
why they try to add additional
sports
sections in school or in college, because some of them don'
t
want to do something for their health, and that obviously reminds adolescence and how they are isn'
t
towant
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want
go to the gym. In my
opinion
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that's true. ,
However
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we still have a person who can be a fan of some
sports
programme
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programmes
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and still take part in physical activity, so that's important for them too like watching some championed on
TV
.
In
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overall
adults
who spend some time in
a sport
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a sport programme
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programmes
sometimes with
adults
but some of them want to be in
these
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this programme
these programmes
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programme
. After most
the
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adults
doesn'
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t
want to include sport in their lives preferring
TV
as well. In ,future we will see
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a
the
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nice
person
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people
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who came
soccer
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to soccer
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, tennis or basketball players because they are watching
sports
programmes
on
TV
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