Some people think that children should obey rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Other people think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems themselves in adulthood. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.
It is undeniable that
children
mostly are expected to obey different rules
either at home or school. Strictness is important sometimes but it might have serious consequences for them. This
issue will be examined in the following essay.
Some people are
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rules
because rules
can hold children
accountable for their behaviour and help them develop good behaviour patterns from a young age. Unlikely adults, children
are normally not interested that them do bad something in society, and setting rules
can make them realise how to behave in a societally acceptable way. For example
, they can learn how to greet suitable, and manners of eating when outside house. Furthermore
, they will receive admiration from parents and teachers, such
as if children
don’t chat or interrupt between teaching, a teacher will admire them and may givethem
a snack as a reward.
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give them
On the other hand
, argue that rules
can limit the improvement of solve-problem skills if those parents prove these strict rules
give privilege to children
’s obedience. Children
will accept that strict rules
are important to follow, but some time
may be unable to solve problems by themselves. Correct your spelling
sometimes
For instance
, some children
were taught to do something carefully, until they must work that
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and
Children
who obey rules
may be bullied and abused by other friends at school because they are given attention by the teacher.
In conclusion, determining rules
for children
it’s essential to themselves and their parents, but enforcing to
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affects more to them such
as they will be against them and have worse behaviour. Thus
, in my opinion should use rules
for children
sometimes as necessary in order to they can solve problems dependently.Submitted by nakassorn on
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