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Some people think that use of social networking apps is very beneficial in today's world. some say that it put negative impacts on the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Social
media
 plays an important role these days. It's a platform where
society
 gets updates within minutes,
however
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 many believe it puts a negative impact on
society
. in my ,opinion it benefits the community in many ways I will elaborate on both views.
Firstly
, in today's ,world social publishing plays an important role in
society
.
society
 gets all the updates on applications. ,
furthermore
, many folks earn through them. there are apps like Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter. for ,example recently there was an accident in my city and there was huge traffic we were able to know it through social
media
 and saved time. with the help of the
,
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news we were able to save time.
on the other hand
, it
also
 has a negative impact on
society
. these days anyone from any place can operate social
media
. many people spread hate and negativity on Facebook which
also
 leads to riots. ,
,
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nonetheless
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 it can be stopped if a company decides to operate a team which removes all the idiocy from the app recently Facebook has fined two hundred million dollars for not removing hate speeches which led to a rampage in many cities in India and other countries.
although
, it can stop if the application team decided and do its best to remove all the hate. social
media
 apps play an important role in today's
society
 and they
also
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 a negative impact on some people.
nevertheless
, it can be stopped by removing all the hate messages.
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