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In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions?

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It is true that efficient communication between the elderly and youngsters are being tough in recent years. In my view, there have been objective factors that need to be considered, and I will elaborate on proper solutions to overcome them. There are two main reasons that lead to the youth feel so hard to have a conversation with the elderly. The most obvious facts are background and experiences which make them exist a huge gap between the two generations. From
this
 perspective, So the elderly cannot understand the meanings expressed by youngsters.
For example
, most young generations are more likely to choose to use a credit card in their daily life in order to realize their purposes.
However
, some ageing populations may blame
this
 behaviour, in general, they used to put it aside in the bank for their future. Given the reasons mentioned above, I believe some steps can be taken to tackle
this
 issue.
The first step is
 that the government could form a communication platform which provides more opportunities for the elderly and youth to have a talk.
This
 way
also
 benefits both of them to improve their relationships based on their living circumstances. Another way to optimize
this
 situation is that
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 should spend spare time accompanying elders in order to help them become old-fashioned and be part of
a
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 family as a whole. In conclusion, the youth and elderly have some differences,which frequently result in obstacles to communication between them , according
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 factors, families and governments should focus on the mental and physical situation of the ageing group.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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