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The graph indicates the stress level on the proffesional

The illustration presents data about
working
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the working
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hours
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 of different professionals and the percentages of them suffering from
stress related
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 problems.
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, despite longer working
hours
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,
business men
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businessmen
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 have fewer mental issues
while
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 the highest is the lecturers, who
work
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 shorter in a
week
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. As the data suggest, business owners
work
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 hardly 70
hours
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 a
week
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,
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which
whic
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which
 h leads the chart more than any other
professionals
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professional
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. In spite of greater professional engagement, their percentage of
work
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 issues is lower
11
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than 11
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%. Doctors and Movie Producers
labor
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labour
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 more than 40
hours
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 per
week
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 and their percentages of illness from
work
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 pressure account
15
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for 15
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 and 18 respectively. Writers and programmers have considered
fewer
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less
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 stress
sickness
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sicknesses
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 regardless of their more office
work
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 duration. The Chefs and lawyers are the most balanced in the charts, who only
work
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 for 40 and 30
hours
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in
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apply
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a
week
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 but
having
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little
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fewer
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 mental problems than the
other
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others
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. Interestingly, the
lectures
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lecturers
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 are the most from stress issues though their working
hours
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 are the lowest in the data.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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