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Governments give lots of supports to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Governments
 in different countries provide financial
support
 to
artists
.
While
 there are
people
 who agree that
government
 should help
artists
 to promote their work, others will argue, that there are more important problems
governments
 should focus on and use funds to address those issues.In
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 I will discuss both views and explain why I think that supporting
artists
 is a good idea.
Firstly
, those who agree that
governments
 should provide financial
support
 to
artists
 believe that
support
 is crucial for keeping
art
 alive. Many famous
artists
 retire after a certain age and stop creating
art
.The young generation of
artists
 usually can not afford to fund their own projects.
For example
, the young painter might not have enough money to hire a venue for the exhibition. A beginner for producer can't produce films without the necessary funds for movie production.
Government
 must help those
artists
 to promote their work.
Secondly
,
art
 is a form of entertainment ,which has become a vital part of
people
's everyday lives.
People
 work long, stressful hours and during their free
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 they should have access to different types of entertainment to forget about their hectic lifestyles.
On the other hand
,
people
 will argue that there are more important problems that
government
 should concentrate on rather than funding
artists
 .
For example
, the
government
 should direct funds to solve recent housing issues, caused by a sudden price rise in housing and by excessive losses of jobs.
To conclude
,
while
 some
people
support
governments
' sponsoring
artists
, others believe that money should be spent on solving more important problems that countries might have I believe, that
although
 there are many issues
government
 should focus on, it is important to
support
artists
 as they often struggle and need to be promoted,
also
 it is vital for keeping the
art
 in
people
's lives.
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