The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart illustrates the types of work that men and women do in the UK in the year 1992.

Overall

it can be seen,

while

female employees mostly do non-manual

labor

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labour

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, male workers do both white-collar and blue-collar

works

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work

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. The proportion of clerical and related and managerial and professional jobs related to female workers accounted for a significant majority, 31% and 29% respectively.

In contrast

, the fraction of craft or similar

works

that women did

made

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up 27% as well and the percentage of unknown non-manual

works

was 9%.

Also

, 3% of female workers worked in other manual occupations and only a tiny fraction worked as general labourers.

Nevertheless

, just over a third of men worked in the managerial and professional sector and just over a quarter did a craft or similar work.

Similarly

, 24% of male employees accounted for an unknown work fraction. Clerical and related and other non-manual jobs represented similar results, 6% for both of them. 2% of men did general

labourers

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labourer

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works

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work

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in 1992.

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