The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart illustrates the types of work that men and women do in the UK in the year 1992.

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it can be seen,

while

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female employees mostly do non-manual

labor

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, male workers do both white-collar and blue-collar

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works

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work

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. The proportion of clerical and related and managerial and professional jobs related to female workers accounted for a significant majority, 31% and 29% respectively.

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, the fraction of craft or similar

works

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that women did

made

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up 27% as well and the percentage of unknown non-manual

works

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was 9%.

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, 3% of female workers worked in other manual occupations and only a tiny fraction worked as general labourers.

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, just over a third of men worked in the managerial and professional sector and just over a quarter did a craft or similar work.

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, 24% of male employees accounted for an unknown work fraction. Clerical and related and other non-manual jobs represented similar results, 6% for both of them. 2% of men did general

labourers

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works

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in 1992.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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