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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather that secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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 are very common in society. Some
children
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 start learning a foreign
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 from early childhood or toddler because from a professional view primary
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 is the golden age for
children
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 to learn a foreign
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. I will discuss my opinion from a cognitive development perspective.  The advantages of learning a new
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 at an early age are significant.
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, their brain still developing, so
children
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 in primary
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 will understand fast and be more receptive than adults.
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, from a cognitive development perspective, they are in a concrete operational stage which means they can have more enthusiasm and curiosity when learning something new.
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 enthusiasm gets
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 to participate more in activities and look forward to going to
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 every day.
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,
children
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 who are enthusiastic when learning a new
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, will try to sing, write, or read anything about that
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. So, they can have a native accent than before. The disadvantage of learning a foreign
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 at an early age is can be confusing for some
children
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. Especially when their parents not using bilingual
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 in their home. So, they cannot practice with their parents.
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, Mario, 4 years old, learn a foreign
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 in his
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, but his parents still use Bahasa in their home. So, he hesitates to speak when talking with his friends. In conclusion, the right time in learning a new
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 is in primary
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 for several reasons I mentioned, which is their brains still developing and from a cognitive development view,
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 have the capability to absorb new words in that stage.
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