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Percentage of households with electrical appliances 1920 2019 Number of hours of housework per week,per household

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Introduction
The first table provides information about the usage of electrical appliances in every household
while
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 the second one illustrates the data
of
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 the figures of
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housework'
houseworks'
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 hours in per week,per household from 1920
2019
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.
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Overall
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,it is obvious from the first table that the most utilization of electrical appliances was
refrigerator
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 during the 10 decades. Started to rise from 0 to 100
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percent
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 dramatically
over
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 1920 and 1980.
Afterwards
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 it kept
stability
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 from 1980-2019 periods respectively.
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Meanwhile
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vocume
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volume
vacuum
 cleaner was the secondary essential electrical appliance during the periods. Experienced from 30
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percent
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 to 100
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percent
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 in the century.
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However
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 the usage of washing
machine
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 started to flap 40
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percent
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 to 70
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1920
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between 1920
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 and 1960.The progress changed
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downwards from 1960 to 1980.
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As you see from 1980
families
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 demands again increased to upwards. But it
was not show
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 rapid changes 72
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at the end
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 of the period.
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The second table shows
that
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the
dramatically
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falls
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 doing housework hours
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a
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per week.During
the
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 period people spend less time year by year doing housework.It started to decrease from 50 to 10 in 10 decades It is noticeable that from 1920 to 1980 you can see rapidly immersing
by
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the contrast until 2019 it stayed stable.
Conclusion
To sum
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up
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 increasing
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 electrical appliances caused to spend less time
to do
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 housework and over the decades it is obvious that
the
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most families used the refrigerator
in
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 a daily bases

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