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Some people believe that in order to reduce crime, prisoners should be given longer prison sentences while some people think there are other alternative ways. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion.

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Some individuals think that to shorten
crime
 rates convicts must have extended
prison
 sentences,
mean
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while
 others believe that there are other ways that can be done. In my
essay
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 I am going to open up
this
 topic more. Starting with a discussion of why certain
people
 believe that longer
prison
 sentences will reduce
crime
,
when
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 others think
otherwise
,
then
 followed by my
opinion
. Many
people
 consider that
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extention
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extension
 of
jail
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 sentence will help to lessen lawlessness.
Particular
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opinion
 comes from
people
 who
thinks
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 that mankind that committed any type of
crime
 will do it again
afterserving
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after serving
 their term. Considered that
people
 who stay in that kind of
places
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 for longer tend to commit less lawlessness.
However
, it is not always come out
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us
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as
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 we expect it to come.
Period
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 of sentence will not change
crime
 rates, it is
much
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complicated
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 thing, that has to do with
person's
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a person's
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 behaviour and state of mind
On the other hand
,
other
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others
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 prefer alternative ways to shorten wrongdoings. They think
thta
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that
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 is the best option to reduce
crime
.
In addition
, many
researches
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researchers
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 have
showen
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shown
 that
such
 kind of activities actually help
people
 to get rid of their old patterns. In their
opinion
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 it is better to do something rather than just spend time within four walls with other
imdividuals
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individuals
 who have committed
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a crime
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crime
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crimes
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.
Finally
, in my
opinion
, I believe that it depends on
a
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 type of
crime
 that person did.
People
 who have done heinous crimes
such
us
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as
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 murder, rape, etc. should stay in
prison
till
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 the rest of their lives.
However
, the rest, who
comperatively
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comparatively
cooperatively
 did less evil should not stay in
prison
 for
to
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 long. They need to
go
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do
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labor
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 activities,
instead
 of staying in the same room with
people
 who can affect them badly.
To sum
up
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 everything
thta
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that
 has been stated before, I want to say that
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extention
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extension
 of
prison
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a prison
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 sentence should depend on
a
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the
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 type of
crime
 that mankind has ever committed. There are a
lot
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 different ways to reduce lawlessness, we should not stick to
onle
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only
one
 one approach. Different crimes require different solutions.
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