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some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young peoples reading and writing skills. do you agree or disagree?

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We are living in an era of advanced technology. In the past couple of years
as a result
 of the rise of social media and the web, young people's main focus is on telecommunication through computers and mobile phones. Some think that
this
 may affect negatively teenagers writing and reading ability, but I agree to some extent. The way that I see it is, we have stepped into
this
 modern world, and it's more convenient if we go on with it and use all kinds of facilities to ease our work.
Furthermore
, it is not necessary to absorb all spells and punctuation marks
wherease
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where
 we can use some application to correct our texts. We have passed that time when we had to interact with someone by sending him/her a handwritten letter. For the reading, the story is different, as optometrists say the blue
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 of any kind of screen
such
 as, smartphones, computers, tablets and etc leads to tired your eyes faster than a paper version and it results in a lack of concentration after a
while
,
then
 you will lose your interest to read long passages,
moreover
 gradually you will get used to reading only small text, if we set the long novels and books aside,
for example
, most of the young people just can read tweets more than even a whole caption on Instagram.
to conclude
: As I explained, digital gadgets have different effects on writing and reading skills. all in all, as long as we know what are the consequences of technology on us, we can control them, in
adition
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 that will be conducive to our life.
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