Some people believe that schools should reward those students who show excellent academic performance while some believe that only the ones who show significant improvement in the grades should be rewarded.
Few sections of society have the notion that
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students
who display outstanding academic achievements should be rewarded, whereas
others prefer to think those who show notable development in the
marks should be gifted. I believe, it is important to admit that both views have their own merits. Change the word
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essay will substantiate my views with relevant examples followed by the conclusion.
On the one hand, rewarding merit students
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the confidence
such
students
, as well as
it is also
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encouragement
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other students
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to study well. For instance
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a district
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day event because he got first rank in Correct article usage
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final
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receive
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excelled
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but it improved my knowledge on
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as well as
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On the other hand
, those students
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all kinds of pupils, including slow learners or quick-witted persons. To illustrate, Remove the article
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besides
quick learners in my class
, there are students
who do not have the ability to understand quickly every sort of concepts
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, my class
teacher gave some gifts, like pens or choclates
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chocolates
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improvement
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an improvement
on
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To conclude
, undoubtedly high scoring students
do not need any motivation as they are self motivated
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self-motivated
while
underachievers do need motivation in the form of rewards to stay on the right path to success. I do believe, schools should investigate their way of teaching and use more visual tools for helping students
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