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many people think that the world should speak one language, others argue that countries should have its own languages. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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These days there is an ongoing debate between
people
 about whether
people
 around the world should speak one
language
 or if each country should have its own, my opinion is that having a common communication
language
 is key ,
,
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however
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 each county should have its own
language
. In
this
 ,essay we will discuss the issue using some examples to support and demonstrate some points. There are several reasons why
people
 argue for a shared
language
 in all countries, one of them is that it could be much easier for
people
 to communicate and share
experience
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, there are claims that
people
 would spend more time on their career, business, studies rather than trying to understand or learn a new
language
. A study conducted in UAE showed that parents all around the world are focusing on their kid's English
language
 and not their mother
language
 because it's wildly used these days and everyone understands it . Those who argue that countries should have their own
language
 have a different point of view and say that it can actually be a good thing.
Firstly
 each country has its own unique history and culture which is a huge part of
people
's identity taking away someone's mother
language
 is like erasing their history , it can
also
 be argued that having different languages and backgrounds is actually really interesting
people
 can share their life experience with others for ,example im a trilingual person English is not my first
language
. I speak English
arabic
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 Chinese and I can understand Turkish, when
i
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 first started learning Chinese it was so difficult because they don't have letters its all characters and you are supposed to memorize each word it took me 10 years to use it fluently,
hence
 it's important for
people
 to learn other languages it's not only fun it can be helpful sometimes.
While
 there are strong arguments on both sides of the case. I personally believe that each county should have its own
language
 and I recommend
people
 to learn at least 3 languages as it can be a really helpful way to communicate with others in all aspects of life.
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