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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Language
 is the primal form of communication.
Hence
, living in a country where you do not know
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 first
language
 can lead to severe issues
such
 as the inability to find friends or difficulty to get a job. In my opinion,
this
 argument is valid and I will describe both examples in detail. In order to meet new people it is essential to be able to understand them. Since friendships are, in most cases, built on
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verbal communication
then
 without the main element of talking it is close to impossible to form any relationship.
This
 can result in a very lonely
life
 that can impact
person’s
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a person’s
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overall
 well-being. I believe rich social
life
 is paramount to
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good mental health.
For example
, if I could not consult something or share certain aspects of my
life
 with my
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 ones I would feel very miserable and my
life
 would be incomplete. The
language
 barrier
also
 poses threats to practical problems. There is only a limited number of jobs that can be performed without knowing a foreign
language
 and
such
 works are usually manual and underpaid.
Therefore
, it is not possible to land a well-paid job if you do not speak the
language
 of
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 country you are in.
Therefore
, it would be hard to make a
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career
 abroad in
this
 situation and one should expect to live a very low-cost
life
. In conclusion, I am convinced that not knowing a foreign
language
 in a country one’s staying
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 serious issues that impact the
overall
 well-being of the person. The impossibility to make new rapports and
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 of finding a new job are the most crucial ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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