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Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter describe the item you lost explain how you lost it tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

#manager #insurance #company #item
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter about my damaged guitar. I had it insured by your company. The guitar was in pretty bad shape when I found it. I had a cancer concert with my band in California on February 14th.
That is
 why we were going there by plane on the 11th of February. After we got there, we could not find our musical instruments at the airport. The staff told us that our things got lost on another plane to another destination. We were very worried because we had a concert. A day later all our things arrived and we were relieved. But my guitar was broken. I had another one for show. I want to fix it because it is my favourite. I look forward to hearing from you about the resolution of my problem. I would appreciate it if you return the lost funds or send someone to fix it. Yours sincerely, Scott
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task achievement
Ensure the introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter for immediate understanding. Although your letter introduces the issue, making the intent clear from the beginning can enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structure and using a wider range of linking phrases to improve flow and coherence throughout your paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
For better cohesion, explicitly separate your letter into clear, distinct paragraphs for each main point. Starting a new paragraph for each of your bullet points (item description, how it was lost, the requested action) can aid readability.
task achievement
Pay attention to detail and ensure accuracy in your writing, such as avoiding spelling or grammatical errors ('cancer concert' presumably should be 'cancer benefit concert' or a similar clarification). This enhances your letter's professionalism.
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