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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the population aged over 65 years old from 1940 to 2040 in three
particularly
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 countries, the
USA
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,
Sweden
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 and
Japan
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. As is shown in the graph, aged over 65 Americans had the highest percentage at the beginning, 9%, followed by
Sweden
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 (6%) and
Japan
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 (5%) in 1940. After that, the population of the
USA
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 and
Sweden
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 had a steady rise at 15% and 14% respectively in 1980,
whereas
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Japan
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 showed a downward trend, below 5%. The population of Japanese elders predict to climb slightly around 10% by 2030 and would increase dramatically
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 26% in 2040, replacing the place of the others.
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, the percentage of elders in the
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 had a plateau from 1980 (15% )to 2020 (14%). In 2040, it is expected to increase steadily to 22%, the lowest one in three countries.
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, the figure for
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 reached a peak at 20% by 2010 , and
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 a minimal decline in the decade, which will grow to 25% in 2040.
To conclude
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, the information shows people who
65-year-old
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65 years old
 and over in
Japan
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 was the lowest percentage
while
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 the
USA
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 is the highest in the initial.
However
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, there will be an exchange position in 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, sweden, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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