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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In many countries these days, technology and innovation can be improved
agriculture
 rapidly
whereas
 lots of
nation
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nations
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 around the world are still
hunger
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hungry
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.
This
 essay will discuss why an
individuals
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 is starved and provide options for solving
this
 problem. Development of
agriculture
grow
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 up continually. Even though there are
people
 who still go hungry on.
For example
, China is the best economic country that can export the most of
agriculture
 in the world because of improvements in farming,
on the other hand
, most Chinese still be poverty society. Another example is India, the Indian population is almost half of the planet, and fifty per cent of Indians are still
hunger
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hungry
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India is the most developing country in
agriculture
 in the world. There are several ways to solve
this
 problem.
Firstly
, the government should provide more opportunities to
a
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poor
people
,
such
 as offering jobs, and dispersed incomes in rural areas.
Secondly
, sharing promotion is one of
keys
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the keys
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 to helping hunger.
For instance
, Rich
people
 can change the food for
people
 who are starved by giving them a job.
Lastly
,
people
 should purchase food as necessary
this
 can contribute to meals
to
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people
 who is
craved
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itcraved
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.
To conclude
,
although
 advancement in
agriculture
 grows fastly, lack of proper management would be the poverty issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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