In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In many countries these days, technology and innovation can be improved
agriculture
rapidly
whereas
lots of
nation
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nations
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around the world are still
hunger
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hungry
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.
This
essay will discuss why an
individuals
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is starved and provide options for solving
this
problem. Development of
agriculture
grow
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up continually. Even though there are
people
who still go hungry on.
For example
, China is the best economic country that can export the most of
agriculture
in the world because of improvements in farming,
on the other hand
, most Chinese still be poverty society. Another example is India, the Indian population is almost half of the planet, and fifty per cent of Indians are still
hunger
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India is the most developing country in
agriculture
in the world. There are several ways to solve
this
problem.
Firstly
, the government should provide more opportunities to
a
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poor
people
,
such
as offering jobs, and dispersed incomes in rural areas.
Secondly
, sharing promotion is one of
keys
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to helping hunger.
For instance
, Rich
people
can change the food for
people
who are starved by giving them a job.
Lastly
,
people
should purchase food as necessary
this
can contribute to meals
to
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people
who is
craved
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.
To conclude
,
although
advancement in
agriculture
grows fastly, lack of proper management would be the poverty issue.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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