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In some part of the world, the rate of divorce has increased dramatically over the past few decades. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

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The
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 rate is increasing in many places. I believe that the breakdown of the extended family and the stresses of work are the major causes of
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 situation. Fortunately,
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 these issues have led to a rise in the
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 rate, there are ways we can solve
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 problem. In my opinion, the biggest cause of
divorce
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 is the breakdown of the extended family. In the past, a family was made up of parents, grandparents, children, and other relatives.
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 meant that there was always somebody available to help with child care. It
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 meant that expenses could be shared in times of financial difficulty. These days,
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 often don't have
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 kind of support from their families, and
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 puts more stress on a
marriage
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. Stress in the workplace is another cause of
divorce
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. These days,
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 are often expected to work longer hours than they did in the past.
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 means they spend less time at home with their families. It
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 means that when they are at home, they are tired and probably irritable, too. All of
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 adds up to an unhappy family life. Fortunately, there are things that can be done to solve some of these problems if
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 really want to.
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 can decide to live closer to their extended family. They can invite their elderly parents to live with them or look for a job closer to their relatives' homes.
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 can
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 look for less demanding jobs or decide to have one parent stay at home
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 of working. These things require changing one's lifestyle in some big ways, but they can lead to a happier
marriage
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 and family life. In conclusion, there are a lot of demands in modern life that place stress on a
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 and lead to
divorce
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.
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,
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 can choose to make changes to their lifestyle that can result in a better, stronger
marriage
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.
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