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Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospitsal. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter -explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital -say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do -give details of when you would be available for this work

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The Royal Derby Hospital, Derby, England. Dear Sir/Ma, Letter of request to perform unpaid work at your hospital. My name is Olayonu Timi, I am writing
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 letter to request to be granted the opportunity to work at your hospital. I would love to do unpaid work at your hospital as it gives me the advantage of contributing towards improving the health sector of our great city.
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, I
will be
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 interested in working as a Health Care
Assistance
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 (HCA), I would love to provide support to children with disability in my capacity as an HCA. I strongly believe with my passion for children and my motive towards contributing to
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 great community,
i
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 will outperform your expectations. More so, I
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 love to take part in
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 job role on the weekend starting with the 10th of March 2023.
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, Saturdays and Sundays are my less busy days. Thank you for your kind consideration, looking forward to your response. Best regards Oalyonu
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer
  • unpaid work
  • free time
  • dedication
  • healthcare
  • assist
  • patients
  • administrative tasks
  • commitment
  • flexibility
  • personal satisfaction
  • inspired
  • community service
  • contribute
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