The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The pie charts indicate how the average proportion of three types of nutrients that may cause some illnesses if people consume too much used in typical meals in the USA. These nutrients are
sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
.
Overall
, it can be seen that Americans consume the major percentages of
sodium
and saturated fat at dinner. Meanwhile, there is the largest proportion of
consumption
of added
sugar
is snacks.
First,
obviously, Dinner is the main source of
sodium
and saturated fat with 43% and 37% respectively,
along with
it containing about a quarter of daily
consumption
of added
sugar
. It cannot be ignored that there is the second source of
sodium
and saturated fat
that is
lunch with 29% and 26% respectively. Regarding breakfast, all three recorded types of ingredients are at the lowest rate at which USA's citizens are eaten with 14% of
sodium
, 16% of saturated fat and 16% of added
sugar
.
Finally
,
although
snacks contain only 14% and 21% of
sodium
and saturated fat in Americans' daily
consumption
, it,
however
, dominates added
sugar
consumption
with 42%.
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