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The table and charts illustrate the finances of the police in the United Kingdom and how they classified the budget from 2017 to 2018.
Overall
, the police finance from several sources
such
 as national government, local taxes, and other sources increased in 2018, and the revenue that was spent on payment for officials decreased. First of all, the total income was raised to over 14
million
euros
 in 2018. Among them, the gap in the local taxes between two years is remarkable, accounting for 102.3
million
euros
 in 2018, followed by the national government (177.8
million
euros
).
On the other hand
, there was minor growth in the other sources
such
 as subsidies, accounting for 38.5
million
euros
. The police spent most of their expenditure on the officials’ wages in both years;
however
, it went down to 69% in 2018.
Furthermore
, The proportion of technology increased to 14% in the same year,
while
 the share of buildings and transport remained constant.
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