In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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of personality and it can be shaped by their
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and ideas, as they look at them as
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any task will always push him forward and teach him to
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that the good
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to be dedicated and hard
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to succeed,
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early age and enable him to face
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difficulties better than other and
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even if he couldn't achieve what he was planning for, he will be able to reach a good point at least and he will learn a lot from that experience. In
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, there are some drawbacks
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telling the children that
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bring
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they want. It is not like
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the wrong direction even with hard
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to concentrate and work hard for something and doesn't know when to change his path
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many
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impossible for some and possible for others, it depends on the abilities, readiness, sight and many other
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However
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it is not for them and they may have good results and perform better in something else.
To conclude
, parents always wish and predict the best for their
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. Teaching the
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generation
that they should fight for their dreams is a good thing and it will help
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to be focused and patient. But it
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learn when to stop.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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