Some people argue that the government should give every unemployed person a mobile phone and should make sure they have access to the Internet. They believe this is the best way of using public money to reduce the problem of unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The Internet is a repository storing information that

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published over the world and with

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immense quantities of that related to many aspects,

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as services,

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opportunities, it becomes the locus for many

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seekers.

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perception has reinforced the idea that those

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unemployed should be entitled

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smartphone

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so that they can gain access to these data.

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initiative seems not to be optimal because of its feasibility and the imprecise capability to solve

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problem

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. The high percentage of unemployment is contributed

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many factors and a

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can do nothing to decrease that.

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being able to access

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the Internet make it easier for many to seek opportunities,

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example

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many companies usually try to outsource those from developing countries with low living cost so that they can cut down the cost of manufacturing,

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action is not enough for comprehensively providing

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job

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a job

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for those in

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pool;

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, the amount of money used for equipping phones can be allocated into vocational training, improving infrastructure to attract more international investment, generating more

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creations. Rather than letting workers engage in the

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pool with no more knowledge but a

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, training them to become skilled

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would offer

a wider payoffs

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an initiative can pose threat to both the beneficiaries and the government- the organization

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responsible for

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supply.

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recipients,

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can be the victim of many predators that target their private information or their entitled

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and chances are the

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can not act effectively as a tool to help users but

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opportunities to those having

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intention

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.

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the perspective of the government,

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proposal requires a huge national budget and the probability to make changes throughout society is still imprecise. The average price for a

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falls around 130 USD ,and with many countries carrying a high rate of unemployment, implementing

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plan seems to bring more pitfalls rather than advantages. In conclusion,

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unemployment

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problem,

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demands many sectors to address its roots.

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mere

phone

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can not only bring

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to owners but

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cause many financial issues for the administration to deal with.