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Some people view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part of growing up,whilst others see it as something negative. Discuss your views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that teenagers and
parents
 both have a difficult time in these stages. During
this
 period, many
children
 argue with their
parents
 about their education relationships. Some thought that
this
 is good for them
while
 others disagree. I believe that it is an essential part of development. Those who argue it is harmful to adolescents have various reasons
firstly
 it affects the parent's and
children
's relationships sometimes it could create problems and tensions in the family.
For example
, smoking is common among teenagers to impress their peers and to show themselves as cool,
while
 these
things
 are uncommon to
parents
 and there could occur fight sometimes
parents
 would slap them because of that they can go through traumatic stress
besides
 that some accidents can happen.
On the other hand
,
this
 is normal
things
 because these teenagers become mature and there will be habits of raising their voices about the wrong
things
.
For instance
, if adolescents have an interest in sports but their
parents
 are forcing his / her to study medicine in
this
 condition if he/ she was unable to rise their voices they will go against their principles and the future aim.
Similarly
, some Asian countries have traditions to arrange marriages(
parents
 will choose their
children
's partner by themself after 18 at any age ) if they have boyfriends or girlfriends or they want to study
further
 and could not defend themselves in the parent discussion they have to sacrifice all
things
 and lives with guilt forever. In conclusion, I am opinions, both are equally important the agreements between the teen and his/her
children
 have good benefits
as well as
 risks. If we could control the risk there would have significant education for youths.
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