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Being able to purchase goods from any place on the planet has made nations around the world become almost identical. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

These days, there has been much discussion revolving around globalization in terms of shopping.
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 some think that it makes countries indistinguishable, I tend to believe that it is an enhancement for humanity. First of all, it is hard to deny that owing to technological advancements, internet shopping has become a major development because of its effectiveness and easy usage. In the past, people tended to
travel
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 thousands of miles in order to sell or purchase items, because not every nation had its own market.
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, being able to buy goods online stopped the merchants from exploring different cultures and nations, and
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 trade the products as well, so people might not be willing to
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 more and
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, some of them might not have a broad horizon.
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, some assert that virtual shopping saved mankind. To take the global COVID-19 pandemic as an example, it was prohibited to
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 around the world, even going to stores was an issue back in the old days. Governments did various measures in order to diminish the risks of getting a virus. Because of
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, online shopping had a tremendous impact, because it was the safest option to buy groceries and other everyday gadgets
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 because just some clicks in
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 smartphone
is
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 needed for delivering goods to the home.
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, it is true that owing to
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cutting-edge technologies, people might be limited to
travel
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 and gain some remarkable experiences, but in my view, online shopping is truly a
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 for humans.

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