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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 research shows us a rising
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how to solve it is taxation. In
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growing
health
 problems in society. Obesity is one of them.
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 is unhealthy
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. It is easy to buy and easy to prepare, so many families use it almost every day.
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 told us that the best way to handle
health
 problems is to increase taxes on junk
food
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This
 solution was implemented in many countries
last
 few years. It is too early to summarize tax
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 people
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 like forced changes. I believe that tax can
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 only on short
time
 and does not work on every family.
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 rather neutral for us. The real
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and forgetting about the social changes. In
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 80 years our way of life, how we work and spent
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 and what we ate completely changed. Nowadays we do not have enough
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 relaxation. I believe that the real solution is to
change
 our mindset and come back to
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 important is to buy good quality foods,
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time
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 process it. We need to come back to work-life balance. Only
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 life can have
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 on our
health
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problem
 is to tax junk
food
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 only the complex changes I suggest can
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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