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A research suggests that damage to the environment is an inevitable consequence of worldwide improvements in the standard of living. Write 150-200 words discussing whether you agree or disagree and why do you take that stance. What effects could it have if the government goes with either choice? Option A: Support the topic. Option B: Go against the topic.

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The
environment
 is always at the receiving end of modern development, and as a
,
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result I support the topic that states that
the
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our
environment
 is inevitably at the receiving end of growth in modern ways of leaving as
this
 leads to deforestation and gross pollution of the
environment
.
Firstly
, every new innovation in modern development
,
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 and
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creation of new housing
estate
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 has led the constant deforestation thereby leading to
an adverse effects
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adverse effects
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 on the forest reserve and depletion of the natural toxins removal of CO2 done by the forest reserves. More so, with every new invention to add more comfort to the life of people,
this
 has
lead
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 to the increase in
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a vehicle
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vehicle
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 that
are
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 know for
mass
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 production of CO2 into the
atmospher
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atmosphere
 and
futher
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further
 endangering the life of fellow people and grossly
distroying
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destroying
distorting
 the
enviroment
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environment
. In
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conclusion
conclution
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 there is a sinanimus relation
with
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 the improvement in the
patern
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pattern
 of life of people and a negative impact on the
environment
.
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