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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Teenagers
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society
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, as they must do social
work
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 for
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 in their leisure hours. It will ease the
community
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as well as
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 teenagers. Teenagers get to know the value of helping
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society
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.
In
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 some extent public may take
disadvantages
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 of it as they know
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young children manage these things, the cleanliness won’t be maintained by the public
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. Youth play a valuable role
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the
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society
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, as they are the future generation to look after
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social life. It doesn’t mean
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society
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 should
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 on them as they will take care of the well-being of the
community
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. As per the survey done by
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university
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,
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society
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as
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equal
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 role to do
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social
work
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the
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community
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. In which
society
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 will
automatic
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 develop the concept of doing
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social
work
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to
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 the
community
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. Surat city became the cleanest city in
country
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the country
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citizens of all
age
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 we part of cleaning and maintaining the place clean.
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, youth should know the value of helping and caring
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people and
place
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. As
per
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the present generation is undergoing
with
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the growth of technology there are more lethargic
to
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 their daily
work
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 and schedules. It’s important to involve teens in social
work
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 and
NGO
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 where they get part of the system,
while
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free
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their free
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 time they can give their efforts in doing service to
society
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. Gradually will develop the thinking “Sharing is caring’’.
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this
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 government implementing a subject of Social
work
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 in schools,
college
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colleges
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 and
University
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universities
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 which will prompt them to know the importance of social service to
society
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 for no cost. In conclusion, youth
in
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 any cost they should serve
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society
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 and people,
willing
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 to help them
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while
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in
there
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their
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 free time. I strongly believe that
this
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 will help them a lot
for
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 their day
today
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to day
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 life. Because helping others is
good
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 deed they are going to earn from
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society
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, which will make them feel proud to help others,
environment
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the environment
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 and area of their well-being.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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