Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Teenagers
plays
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an important role
to
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the
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society
, as they must do social
work
for
society
in their leisure hours. It will ease the
community
as well as
teenagers. Teenagers get to know the value of helping
to
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society
.
In
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some extent public may take
disadvantages
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of it as they know
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young children manage these things, the cleanliness won’t be maintained by the public
due to
this
. Youth play a valuable role
to
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the
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society
, as they are the future generation to look after
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social life. It doesn’t mean
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society
should
be depend
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on them as they will take care of the well-being of the
community
. As per the survey done by
renowned
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university
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,
the
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society
as
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equal
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role to do
the
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social
work
the
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community
. In which
society
will
automatic
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develop the concept of doing
the
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social
work
to
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the
community
. Surat city became the cleanest city in
country
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as
their
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citizens of all
age
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we part of cleaning and maintaining the place clean.
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, youth should know the value of helping and caring
of
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people and
place
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. As
per
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the present generation is undergoing
with
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the growth of technology there are more lethargic
to
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their daily
work
and schedules. It’s important to involve teens in social
work
and
NGO
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where they get part of the system,
while
in
free
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their free
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time they can give their efforts in doing service to
society
. Gradually will develop the thinking “Sharing is caring’’.
For
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this
government implementing a subject of Social
work
in schools,
college
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colleges
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and
University
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universities
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which will prompt them to know the importance of social service to
society
for no cost. In conclusion, youth
in
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any cost they should serve
to
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society
and people,
willing
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to help them
while
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in
there
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their
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free time. I strongly believe that
this
will help them a lot
for
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their day
today
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to day
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life. Because helping others is
good
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deed they are going to earn from
the
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society
, which will make them feel proud to help others,
environment
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and area of their well-being.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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