As well as making money, businesses also have a responsibilty towards society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The main role of business is to produce and distribute goods and services to satisfy public needs or demands. I agree with the viewpoint that aside from gaining profit, they have

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duties to pursue towards the community. Nowadays, businesses are all around the corner ,

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aside from making money they have to follow the rules and regulations to operate a business.

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, most souvenir shops sell over-pricing goods to tourists,

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the price is not really expensive as they thought and not really handmade as well, they give wrong information ,

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they do not follow the pricing standard of the government. It is not because the financial officer cannot monitor them every now and

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, they should

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be true and honest to the customers.

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, they must not cause any harm to human, animals and all living organism,

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, there is one factory near my hometown forced to close, for the reason that people nearby complains of difficulty breathing and plants are dying, because of the thick smoke coming from the factory, which found out, that the factory releases dangerous chemicals. Aside from that, making a profit they have to make sure that it will not create problems, which includes health and safety in the place. In conclusion, aside from making money, business individuals should follow the rules and regulations,

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the safety and protection of everybody, having a genuine and pure heart to serve the people and society is equally important in making a profit.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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As well as making money, businesses also have a responsibilty towards society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Human activities have led negative effects on plant and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As is often said that “Prevention is better than cure,” For this reason, governments should spend national health budget more on the prevention of diseases than on treatment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?