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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June.
#requests #information #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june
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The line graph illustrates
requests
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 for information in
person
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,by letter/email and by
telephone
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 ways at a tourist office in the UK between January and June
Overall
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,all three lines started with a number less than 1000.
However
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,two of them were by the end of the graph risen sharply,
while
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 the other one fell even to a less number. In January,in-
person
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requests
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 started to rocket,
while
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 the leader by the amount,the
requests
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 by
telephone
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 slid till February.
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,after the winter ,
requests
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 by
telephone
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 had a notable rise,
while
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requests
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 in
person
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 continued to increase.By the second month, the
telephone
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 ones were stable and were equal to 1000.At the same time
requests
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 in
person
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 grew to about 1300.
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,after stability,
requests
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 by phone rose sharply and did it till the end,
while
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requests
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 in
person
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 did it too,but more abruptly .By letter
requests
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 were almost stable till March.After that number from about 700 decreased to almost 400.From May to Jun applying letters apply continued to be steady.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words requests, person, telephone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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