As well as making money, businesses also have a responsibilty towards society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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business
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towards society.I
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. To embark on,the most significant
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of
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bussiness
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business
man is to be aware
about
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hazardous
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effect
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business
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large industries
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harmfully
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gases
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into the environment and the
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business
have to protect
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by using various
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that
lowers
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the rate of pollution.
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,the developed
countries
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issue various laws and implement various rules for the
bussiessmen
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businessmen
and the environment of these
countries
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is more clear than developing
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. Moving toward
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detail,the
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business
is liable for
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of
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.In
datail
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detail
,the
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should invest 20
percent
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of revenue for the improvement and establish any charitable society for the people of the nation.
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makes
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a. Laws for the formation of charitable societies by
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large
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bussiness
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business
industries And the people of that nations are
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happier than other
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.
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so that
bussinessman
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businessman
businessmen
should help the poor civilians of the society
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