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In order to reduce crime, we need to attack the cause of crime such as poverty and lack of educational opportunities. It’s not enough to simply have more police on the street and put more people into prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, the
crime
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 rate is dramatically rising,
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, to decline the number of criminals we have to fix the reason behind it,
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 as poverty and lack of education,
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 of merely increasing the number of patrol
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. I agree with the viewpoint and give my justification throughout
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 essay. On one hand, having more safety
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 will help the government to maintain safety measures and ensure proper rules and regulations,
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, investigating drug dealers around the nation, and how they are bringing drugs to the country, with more security
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 they can strictly scan all the incoming goods.
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, if there are enough of them working together, they can solve the
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 faster
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 catch the criminals easily, as they said two is always better than one.
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, hitting the main cause of these should be given priority in order to control their number of multiplying.
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, preventing the cause is better than resolving the effect since it is easier to solve the problem if it is not yet reached the limit,
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, if the individual is well educated, he can find a better job opportunity to be financially stable which unlikely to steel in order to live. If only people can study they can
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 help their families and uplift them from poverty, which helps them to avoid doing
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 things that are against the law
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 way
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 is likely to be avoided. In conclusion, giving proper measures like removing the cause like poverty and lack of education is equally important as having enough police
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 to combat the
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. On top of that , the main goal is to lower the
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 rate and both combined together are a better option.
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