The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic shows
an information
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information
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in
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the production process of beverages.
Overall
, there are five man-made stages in producing
the
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carbonated drinks. It begins with
water
being added as
a
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raw
materials
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material
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then
cleansed, evaporated, mixed, filtered and packed which results in carbonated drinks being delivered. First of all, the
water
pass
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the filtering stage where a chemical is
being
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added to soften the
water
. After that, the
water
is
pump
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pumped
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into the electric heaters and goes to the cooling pipe. In the carbon dioxide
chamber
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the
water
reacts to produce carbonated
water
. Following that, it is placed
in
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in the mixing tank for
falvouring
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flavouring
and
coloring
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colouring
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. The carbonated
water
is
filter
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filtered
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once again before it fills the bottles and cans. Once packed it
placed
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is placed
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in
the
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a
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box and can be transported
in
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to
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the supermarket.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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