The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic shows
an information
Remove the article
information
a piece of information
in
the production process of beverages.
Change preposition
on
Overall
, there are five man-made stages in producing Linking Words
the
carbonated drinks. It begins with Correct article usage
apply
water
being added as Use synonyms
a
raw Correct article usage
apply
materials
Correct the article-noun agreement
material
then
cleansed, evaporated, mixed, filtered and packed which results in carbonated drinks being delivered.
First of all, the Linking Words
water
Use synonyms
pass
the filtering stage where a chemical is Change the verb form
passes
being
added to soften the Unnecessary verb
apply
water
. After that, the Use synonyms
water
is Use synonyms
pump
into the electric heaters and goes to the cooling pipe. In the carbon dioxide Wrong verb form
pumped
chamber
the Add a comma
,chamber
water
reacts to produce carbonated Use synonyms
water
.
Following that, it is placed Use synonyms
in
in the mixing tank for Change preposition
apply
falvouring
and Correct your spelling
flavouring
coloring
. The carbonated Change the spelling
colouring
water
is Use synonyms
filter
once again before it fills the bottles and cans. Once packed it Wrong verb form
filtered
placed
in Add a missing verb
is placed
the
box and can be transported Correct article usage
a
in
the supermarket.Change preposition
to
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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